Will you read my story?

[Thomzo]

I am currently doing an OU course in literature. My final assignment is to write a 1,500 word story. I've done the first draft but I would like someone to read it through and give me their comments, in case it's rubbish. I know there are several members here that read a lot so you must know a good story from a bad one.

If you would like to have a read and give me your comments, I would be really grateful. PM me and I'll e-mail it to you.

Just a word of warning, it is quite 'dark' and deals with some difficult emotions (or at least that's what I've tried to do) so please don't read it if you are feeling a bit down.

Thanks guys
Zoe

[Milims]

I'd love to read it!

[Millymollymandy]

Good luck Zoe, I won't offer to read it as I don't read 'proper' books (as I was once told just because I haven't read Dostoevsky ) and I've already told everyone that I hate Shakespeare and think it's a load of old codswallop. Any serial killers in your story?

[becks77]

Hi Zoe,
Would love to read your story, pm if you like
Becks

[wolfsong]

I'll read anything with a cover, or without! hell, I read menu's to keep myself amused.
And since my collection of trashy Wilbur Smith has run out, and I'm keeping the book on Simon de Beauvoir and Jean-Paul Sartre (my fav philosphers) till my bike trip, I'm in!

[mrsflibble]

I'd give it a go!

[red]

I'd be happy to read it - but no good if you want spelling or grammar pointers -!

[Thomzo]

Thank you so much everybody. I have sent it to all those who pm'd me their e-mail addresses. The rest of you, I don't know how to attach it to a pm so can someone please point me in the right direction?

Thanks
Zoe

[Thomzo]

Well, the story has now been submitted, fingers crossed I'll get a reasonable mark.

Thank you to everyone who read the story and gave me your comments. I have tweaked it slightly following your suggestions and I feel it now flows much better.

Thank you, as well, to all the people who volunteered to read it but for various reasons, I didn't get to send it to.

Cheers
Zoe

[red]

ooh let us know how you get on!

[pumpy]

i'm sure you will be o.k. Let us know how you get on.

[old tree man]

The best of luck

[Rosendula]

Good luck Zoe. I'm sure it will be fine and you'll get a good mark.